Okay, several pointers to the people who made this, especially to Terry if he edited it heavily:
- Don't talk about "us" or "our world" in a Wikipedia article. This should have been obvious; Wikipedia is a dictionary, not a collection of advertisements.
- Linking keywords internally to other Wiki articles is especially important in the case of an article that is likely to be labeled as "not important enough" and then promptly deleted. The first paragraph is critical in this regard, yet no one had wikilinked such words as "Neverwinter Nights", "Forgotten Realms" or "Underdark" -- and the most important name of all that your average Wikipedia reader might recognize, Dungeons & Dragons, wasn't so much as mentioned in the whole article.
- On the same note, linking other articles to yours is even more important if you want to show that the article is important enough. Not only does it distinguish the article through Wikipedia's structure, but it also increases the visitor count of the page. As I'm writing this, the article is placed in only one category (multiplayer online games).
- You can't expect the average person to know what such acronyms as "PC" (in this context) or "OOC" mean. You have to spell them out and preferably even link them to the appropriate articles, if such exist.
- How important are details such as the current sheriff of the Watch or the current leader of the Spellguard to your average reader who's never played on EfU? Paying too much attention to irrelevant details such as these only reinforces the impression that the article has been written as an advertisement.
Lastly, everyone should make sure that they've got the code of the page copied somewhere so that the article can just be posted back if it gets deleted. I'm not sure if that's allowed, so make sure you do it from a public computer >.> (save the page in an email account)
It's a rather informative page nevertheless as it is currently, kudos to all who contributed -- it just needs some additional work if you want there to be even the chance that it won't get deleted. It also still needs to look more like a dictionary entry and less like the server's homepage: pay attention to the perspective as you write. (This doesn't mean, of course, that you couldn't take advantage of the information provided on EfU's website.) The "server features" -part requires particular attention, too many emphatical, ad-like adjectives are used even after I corrected all the "we"/"us"/"our" sentences.
Edit: I decided to delete the part about server features, it needs to be redone completely anyways (if at all) and was putting the page in bad light due to the way it was copied directly from www.escapefromunderdark.com.